I'm liking this story so far. Being thrust into an operation under progress is a good unique way to get to know the characters and what they are like and what the dynamics are. The paneling on page 11 with the guards could use some work but the rest of it flows very well and helps guide me through the page. I would say this chapter could benefit from a little more scenes and interaction around the scene where Yani was a distraction to give it some room because the setting time, distraction phase, and the detonation seemed a bit too quick since that distraction time could be used for world building about what the team may be after since…
I'm liking this story so far. Being thrust into an operation under progress is a good unique way to get to know the characters and what they are like and what the dynamics are. The paneling on page 11 with the guards could use some work but the rest of it flows very well and helps guide me through the page. I would say this chapter could benefit from a little more scenes and interaction around the scene where Yani was a distraction to give it some room because the setting time, distraction phase, and the detonation seemed a bit too quick since that distraction time could be used for world building about what the team may be after since…